Tip: The point you make in the paper should matter: Avoid formula and generic words.
Search for concrete subjects and active verbs, revising as many "to be" verbs as possible.
Being specific in your paper will be much more successful than writing about general things that do not say much.
Don't settle for three pages of just skimming the surface.
The opposite of a focused, narrow, crisp thesis is a broad, sprawling, superficial thesis.
Compare this original thesis (too general) with three possible revisions (more focused, each presenting a different approach to the same topic): Your thesis statement is no exception to your writing: it needs to be as clear as possible.
Do not assume, for example, that you have the same understanding of what “society” means as your reader.
To avoid misunderstandings, be as specific as possible.